by Kyle Oct 26, 2007
category :
Life, society /
inspirational
As the wind blows air through the hole where my heart once beat, the saddest tune drowns out the silence, i rise to my feet. Angels with tears in their eyes appear. The most beautiful angel steps forth, she steps near. "Please don't cry, dry your eyes. You don't deserve to die" she says. "why? can't i die? i try my best, its no lie" she hugs me tight, as the i feel the most beautiful feeling touch my soul, the angels sing a joyful song, i feel something beat. i touch my chest...there is no hole. she takes my hand and places it over the thumping beat, "i give you a new heart, i've left my mark" she says as she dries my eyes that weep. "you put yourself before you put others, you sacrifice yourself, you will meet a girl one day, she will make your heart melt" she says as ascends, my eyes cry nomore, my heart she mends. i lie down, thinking in this dream, "was it real? it had to be, thats what it seemed"i pass out....... |
Kyle i dont understand wat is happning here. |
I LOVE IT :):):) |
Another beautiful poem. It's really great. You put your feeling well. The structure was a little of and it would look better if it was in stanzas, but it's still beautiful. I'll still give you 5/5 |
by retro babii
Beautiful :') lol 5/5 again! |
by Shinobi
Wow, never expected that to happen, This is more a story than a poem. Maybe if you try to build it differently... Nice story though 4/5 |