Turn the Time

by Jenni   Oct 29, 2007


Take me back to our place
and tell me it was such a waste.
Where we used to gaze up at the stars
and we swore that we saw mars.
Where I used to look into your eyes
little did I know, they were capable of lies.
Now, here is my heart shattered,
Those nights, they never mattered.
Now when I wish upon a shooting star,
I wish I knew who you really are,
Instead of this person you pretended to be
when you looked me in the eye, loving me.

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This poem is about my ex-boyfriend of 6 months. We used to have this special place that we went to, and now I feel like it means nothing.

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  • 16 years ago

    by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA

    Very beautiful poem. I can totally relate to this since I used to have a place somethin like that with my ex who passed away, but anyway, back to the poem. It showed so much feeling, how something you think is so special, when in the end it can mean nothing. I loved it so much. Great job! This will definately go into my favs! 5/5

    .:CiNdY:.

  • 16 years ago

    by Kitten

    This is such a sad poem i really like it though and i can relate well to it

  • 16 years ago

    by Infected with His Deadly Love

    For a short poem, you done a good job.
    The imagery was clear and it flowed well.

    "Instead of this person you pretended to be
    when you looked me in the eye, loving me
    I liked those two lines the best.

    Keep writing, your talented.

  • 16 years ago

    by Lemma

    This is really sad, I especially love the last four lines:

    "Now when I wish upon a shooting star,
    I wish I knew who you really are,
    Instead of this person you pretended to be
    when you looked me in the eye, loving me."

    They sum up the poem perfectly. The rhyme was great and although the flow was very occasionally disrupted, it didn't really matter. This is great =)

    5/5

    Em xXx

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