This is really sad, I especially love the last four lines:

"Now when I wish upon a shooting star,
I wish I knew who you really are,
Instead of this person you pretended to be
when you looked me in the eye, loving me."

They sum up the poem perfectly. The rhyme was great and although the flow was very occasionally disrupted, it didn't really matter. This is great =)

5/5

Em xXx

For a short poem, you done a good job.
The imagery was clear and it flowed well.

"Instead of this person you pretended to be
when you looked me in the eye, loving me
I liked those two lines the best.

Keep writing, your talented.

This is such a sad poem i really like it though and i can relate well to it

Very beautiful poem. I can totally relate to this since I used to have a place somethin like that with my ex who passed away, but anyway, back to the poem. It showed so much feeling, how something you think is so special, when in the end it can mean nothing. I loved it so much. Great job! This will definately go into my favs! 5/5

.:CiNdY:.