The main objective was good, but the rhyming seemed forced. Not all poems rhyme. In fact, some of the best poets do never use rhyme at all. The key is knowing when it should be used, and this poem already had a deep meaning, it did not need rhymes to attract readers.

Thanks:)!
Its a dream that keeps repeating itself to me, and I wanted to write it down before it left my thoughts for the day,
It was a quick job , i still have to go through some editing and change a lot

I don noe bout ne1 else but to me that poem is relly touching....i can imagine how you felt...but other than that the poem was great...I loved it