Hun, this was a very deep peice. The begining was very strong, the flow never faltered, and the emotion's stayed true. However the ending was a little weak. Still an excellent peice though,the ending didn't effect the poem too steeply, so just try and rearange the wording or something and the peice will be excellent.

Still enjoyable.
Well done,
--Elly.

Wow very nice poem i like the last stanza the most. i love how you write from the heart 5/5