by xxSuicidalxx Oct 30, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
I can feel myself sinking |
Wow i liek the intensity of it. Keep up the great work! |
Mostly, it was outstanding. Especially the 2nd to last stanza. But maybe you could 'and go to the hell down under' on the last line. It would just make the poem flow more and make it easier to understand. |