Wow! This piece is so emotional and truly deep. You wrote it on great way, and you described feelings excellently. It is so interesting and original.

-Shivering, freezing cold all the time
No matter how many clothes I wear
Dreams shattered, thoughts in fragments
This pain has become to much to bear-

I totally love this stanza, it is so sad and complex. Whole piece has captivating atmosphere and I like idea for it. Ending is also very effective and you painted beautiful, yet so sad picture, with your words. Well done!

Wow... I love this piece. I can relate to it in so many ways...
Whole poem is excellently written, with great rhymes and flawless flow. It is very deep, filled with amazing descriptions. I like it from the beginning to the end.
My favorite stanza is:

-Shivering, freezing cold all the time
No matter how many clothes I wear
Dreams shattered, thoughts in fragments
This pain has become to much to bear-

5/5 from me

I guess that i am one of those people

thing i like:
how your poem applies to more people that you probably think it does

improvement:
You might want to make your point just i bit more clear

other wise good job

:~)Sam Mayo

A really profound piece, showing such pain,
Really well written.

It was a bit unclear to me though..

5/5