More of a story not a poem to me but definetly fits the "poem" category it has all the parts a poem would :) could use some work to sound more like it.....could....should,......iono

"I ask "Where are you going?"
He drifts back to wards me and whispers,
"Home." "

I really loved these lines, they gave me chills. It has a little bit of a problem with flow in some places, but i think its a really good write. Awesome idea.