by Natasha Oct 31, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Sweet children |
Most excellent poem u took a simple title and turned it in to a work of art excellent job. Writing about these such things are difficult you did an excellent job. |
While I find your words touching and very rhythmic, I have one main comment. I know that there is a lot of pain in this world, only the ignorant don't see it. But I also think there is still hope. It seems that generations will only get worse, but if we all put in an effort to try for a better life, I do believe it can be done. Our children will only fade away if we let them. I don't think you would allow that, and neither would I. Keep up the good work, you have the heart =) |
by Bryan
Tis a very good poem tasha, i love the flow and the grammer tis perfect, i give it a 5/5!!! keep them coming babe!!! |
by Jackie
An amazing poem, absolutely brilliantly written, 5/5 |
by Solus
One day all children will have to grow in a world full of war and suffering. I weep at the mere thought of it. |