Comments : Shoes

  • 16 years ago

    by H E Losey

    Cute write! couple suggestions for rhythm:

    At the store
    tons of shoes
    it makes it hard
    for me to choose

    On the floor
    shoes in bins
    upon the shelves
    are moccasins.

    I could pick from
    a soccer cleat
    or those uggs
    for my feet

    Or what about
    those magic heels
    from the witch
    that Dorthy steals.

    rain boots
    wooden shoes
    army boots
    which to choose?

    or how bout those
    old thong like sandals
    which have straps
    like leather handles?

    as always an opinion.

  • 16 years ago

    by Marie

    Hahaha! every woman's thoughts at closeout sales..... I wish it had a more definite ending though, it kinda left me hanging. 4/5!