Trapped In Onyx Dream (Haiku)

Here I can propose an advice which can be taken into consideration. It is always preferred that you should not repeat the title inside the haiku but rather to pick up the chance to use that extra line (the 1st line of this haiku) in some other information. That's preferred for every haiku since it's short (only 3 restricted short lines) and whenever one would like to write a haiku he/she feels over controlled to give huge information (which may mean volumes when explained) in few short lines (just 3 lines). Moreover, the use of a haiku form in dark poems is very rare and here you rocked it by breaking this wrong idea and gave an example of high-level poem. From the meaning I got from this poem I reached a stage that you can really write marvelous and brilliant poems in few words ..... so what would be the situation if you give a chained haiku as an example?
There's no other chance for argument in this manner.
Overall:
You gave an example of high-order poem which I really support (stamping on it with my 10 fingers). Thank you so much. I'm really looking forward to reading extra work of you. Please keep penning.

It's a very good poem, but I guess I've read them in the wrong order. I should have started with this one.
Although it is a very good piece of literature - it is completely blown out of the water by your other haiku's.

The strong point of this piece for me is the middle line. That's definitely the highlight of it.

A nice dark poem, well expressed.
I'm definitely not giving it the credit that it surely deserves. So I apologise.

~Pete.

I'm not really into the dark poems, so I didn't really understand it. Its good though.

<mOnStRiTo'S pRiNcEsS>

I loved this..the emotion and depth you put into this were beautifully done, and despite the haiku form being so short, you managed to pull this of wonderfully.

The imagery you created in this small piece is amazing, it created very strking pictures in my mind and I adore the ending you used here.

I didnt quite get the meaning to this. so i rated this a 4. but overall this was a good write. keep it up