AWESOME!!!

This was great, i loved it, it was awesome. keep it up, 5*5
Kimberly

Hey Jay this is a pretty good poem but i think you could have used some different vocab in places to make it a little stronger for example

Drowned in a world un-known, Could have been

Drowned in a catastrophic world un-known. That type of thing.

Good meaning though i liked it =)