I personally think the ending is good the way it is. It's actually a really good poem. Just when you're going to say "to" don't use the number, and don't use the number in the title either.
I've cruised around in the forums, and a lot of people avoid poems like that.
But, this is an excellent poem =)
Keep it up.

Maby if you wanted to try a diff ending get the whole idea why u feel alone why u have learned to love and hate unno get some feelings in the end
but its still good stuff.....what do u listen to punk ....screamo?

Love the poem. and i would use like, after the faint part

but nobody cared

or something kinda like that, u no?
but actually, i kinda like it the way it is! good job!!!

Saaaad!
good poem.