That was one of the most beautifully written poems ive ever read EVER! That was great, YOU'RE great!

You have some pretty good vocab in here, and the overall imagery and thought in this is great. I have some critique though; keep your stanza's the same length, as well as your rhyme scheme. Otherwise it throws off the reader and the flow. Also, try to keep your line lengths the same, it helps as well. Just a few suggestions. Other than that, it was pretty good. Well done.

Tammie

Grass green- this should really be reversed.

until dawn and dusk collide... -i love this line!

still needs some work, but i think it and you have potential.

October x

Its a very well writeen poem. The sturucture is nice and it flows very well. The "most romantic guy" is the breaking point. The only thing that needs imporvment. The poem has a sophisticated vocabulary, but "guy" is slang and imformal. Also the poem is in first person, then mentions "you'll" which is second person.

{5/5}

[PygmyPuff]

Aww i really love this one. its a wonderful feeling to be in love isnt it =]

Thos poem is s lovey and sweet! <333 its cute
:)

Its so sweet

That is so cute

Thank you and i love urs it has so much passion n it's real lovely

Very nice. good word choice. Had a nice flow. Lots of emotion. all in all great poem 7/5

This is amazing! keep it up! =]
Amanda

This is really good.
i love how you worded it out
very nice
5/5

I LOVE this...it's beautifully written and paints a lovely picture!
it is exactly how i wish my love life was like

Your writing is very impressive... if you didnt tell me you were new to it i would have thought you had been writing for years.

This is a pretty good poems ive read your others as well and they are all really well written... lack some rythm but not every poem needs a beat... and some times they carry a ryhme and somtimes not but ryhmes are like a rythm not always needed.... youre a good writer

I don't know why but it made me cry O.o wow. I want a guy like that.

Kudos hun :) 5/5

So pretty! love it, girlfriend!!!

Dangg maynn that was heartfelt
i felt it
ahhh
i wishh i had that kind of a guyy