An interesting short write for me. I don't really like dark poems, and this one reinforced why I don't like them...the answer: simply because the are all so morbid. Now don't get me wrong, I'm not saying your is bad, I'm just stating I don't like the category because people tend to be very cliched in this category always writting about death.

Overall just an okay write for me, 4/5

Peace, Joe