This was a truly splendid dark poem. Right from the very first line you can tell it's going to be out of this world (quite litterally)

It's very obvious from the types of poems you write that you have a beautifully twisted mind and a very vivid imagination. This is not an insult, on the contrary - it's a very good thing.
You're able to take a fictional being and bring it to life so much that by the time the reader has finished with your poem, they believe in it themselves.

This poem has extremely clear and vivid imagery in it, so much so that if the reader was to close their eyes - I guarantee they would be able to visualise these creatures exactly as you have made them.

The only slight mistake I can see (and it is a miniscule one) is this ...
"to feed little beast tummy..."
Needs to be
"to feed little beasts tummy..."

A truly entertaining and imaginative poem, filled with horror and gore.

[5/5]

~Pete.

Amazing poem would u mind reading mine pleaze just pick one i dont care which one LOL

Again an interesting write for me, it was okay, could've been better, but overall it was good. Nice write,keep it up.

Peace, Joe