That poem lacks emotion. it didnt seem sad to me, more comical. and im fairly sure that wasnt your intention. their is some talent in their you might need to keep practising tho.

3.5

I disagree with the comment above.

I thought there was plenty of emotion in this, and it was heart breaking. As a smoker myself, I know how others sometimes react to the news that a loved one is smoking, so I can understand, if not feel, the pain that you are talking about in this piece.

I thought it was both original and unique in concept, and I loved the ending, it left me wanting more.