This is a very beautiful poem. I loved the smooth flow of it and the concept of it. I also loved the use of imagery that you created. It has a few grammar errors though; and you need to check you punctuation in some areas. But, overall, this was a fantastic poem and I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing your gift.

Letty

I liked that it flowed really good together.it could use some work and better grammor like the other one had mentioned already and it would be sooo great but i did like it!

Me like this one too, lol. It's very truthful in some ways too bad society hasn't made it to that stage...if you know what I mean. Well, this one is a good poem too.