Wow deep and sad, I kinda relate 5/5 maybe u can read one of mine.

I think it was a bit too cliche' for me.
3.5
the idea was alright but you need to work more on originality. still very raaw and pain felt.

keep writin' sweetcheeks.

Sentimental one. love it very much!!!

I like the ending, it is very interesting and it adds a lot of effect to the flow of this piece. I think that you could use some metaphors to make more powerful atmosphere and to express emotions on a better way. Anyway nice poem, but it could be even more better.