Hey this poem is great you worded it perfectly and it shows a lot of emotion and flows perfectly 5/5 keep it up :)

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Powerful poem with a nice rhyme scheme 5/5 maybe u can read one of mine.

Aww. great poem. i love the emotion put into it. great job

I was a bit confused when i read it the first time, and had to read it again. I still wasn't clear on what you were trying to say, but I still liked it.

Wow. That's amazing. I really really really liked the ending. the last stanza was just..perfect. loved the word choice. =]

Happy writing.
Hannah-

I love this. It's written with so much emotion, I was about to cry! Definately 5/5
You are a great writer

This was so heatrbreaking, and at the same time so beautifully written.

The emotion and depth you put into this piece were wonderfully done, and easily felt by the reader, while the imagery you created painted very vivid pictures in my mind.

The flow was good throughout the piece and I found the overall poem to be touching and very moving.

Beautifully written.