This was really good. I liked how you said the same thing in a differently beautiful way each time.

Very nice poem of love, connecting and togetherness.
I think you really wore your heart on your sleave with this poem, it truly lets the reader see into your state of mind. Many people will be able to relate (in different ways) with this poem, just about everyone in a relationship has been in a position just like this.

Love poems can, at times, get soppy sentimental and come across as contrited. You kept that all out of this piece and made it real.

I would have liked to see more imagery used in this piece, you could really have brought it to life with more use of metaphors etc..

Still a really enjoyable poem to read, well thought out and truly heartfelt.

Nice work.

~Pete.