Thou Art A Votary To Fond Desire

by Pete   Nov 5, 2007


Upon crystal autumn welkin thee gaze,
Passion stoically displayed within thee.
Trundling past in this pother full phase.
Of thine obscured course why canst thee not see?

Too easily dost thou dewray thine trust,
With perforce intended others thee cog.
Cozeners compose, defy them thee must.
Unto mens trust thee display thine agog.

Pondering why thine affect dost be spurned.
Thee advance unto her who art betrothed,
Bid unto she, love that canst be returned.
Thou canst contend whence thou art being loathed.

Thine disposition canst be rubb'd nor stopped.
The untouchable thy wish for somehow.
Unto new office must thy now adopt.
I'll roundly resolve this debacle now,

Heart and noddle art thine biggest liars,
Thou art devoted to fond desires.

*A Shakespearean (English) sonnet has three quatrains and a couplet, and rhymes abab cdcd efef gg
Usually, English and Italian Sonnets have 10 syllables per line.*

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  • 17 years ago

    by debbylyn

    I love the sonnet form...this is quite good.
    I must say I love the ending couplet:

    "Heart and noddle art thine biggest liars,
    Thou art devoted to fond desires."

    You've impressed me with your effortless use of Old English.....true to the form, perfect for the Shakespeare contest.....

    One small suggestion....I feel some of the punctuation marks at the ends of the lines could be eliminated......

    Nice read....I really enjoyed it! Take care, Debbie

  • 17 years ago

    by gack60

    Hi will!

    im witn fragile soul im afraid mate, i found it hard to read also (probably cos im a dumb ass). I think it might just be a little overwhelming on the shaksperean side.

    On the other hand, for people who like reading this sort of thing they'll love it to bits.

    For the grammer and style im giving it a 5/5 but for the readability factor im giving it a 3/5.

    So overall in my opinion its a 4/5.

    Gary.

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