Nice effort for a first attempt together, I like the alternating stanzas makes it sound like you're almost arguing with each other on whose opinion is better.
The flow was a little bit shaky in the first couple of stanzas but settled into a nice smooth rhythm after the initial stutter.
Nice imagery used throughout, captures the readers imagination nicely.

I would personally have liked to see a few more metaphors in this, I think it would really have brought it to life.

Overall a very unique idea, nicely written.
I eagerly await any further collab you two do together.

Nice work Libby.

~Pete.