I like the message this promotes. Don't like the repetition of the word non-actions... First line is a stunner though. Great job.

Stunning.
First to lines, perfectly put. Last two lines, killer.
The rest?
Let's just say, you have talent.

I didnt much like the "non-actions" repeat either, but if you canged that it would be a 5/5 rather then a 4/5. It was a really good poem.

xx
Taeagn Emily