I loved how this started off. The last couple stanzas weren't as strong as the beginning onces. But a really beautiful poem indeed! I enjoyed the read. Keep writing!!! 5/5

` Liz =]

Another amazing write. I love your word choice. The flow was excellent. Wonderful write, but yet again it lacks puncuation.

Peace, Joe

This is amazing from the first to the last line. The imagery that you created in every stanza is truly breathtaking and vivid- your descriptions made superb atmosphere.
My favorite stanza is:

- tears trickling down her pale face
blood stained feathers casted down
bruises lay upon her delicate figure
she screams, but there's no sound-
^^
Very vivid and effective.

5/5 from me

You know i have a veary darkend life.
but id do any thing to add light to yours.
just having you as a friend means alot to me. i know our wounds are not the same but
thare simaler. if you need some one to talk to you know my nuber. and if you like it or not im gana bug you as much as i can :-P

I really liked the images in this poem. They kept me wanting to read more but the only thing I wished the story line waas abit more detailed other then that it was a good read Plot121