Comments : Night Sky [triple haiku]

  • 17 years ago

    by crystaljean88

    I like ths. the topic was intresting. my fav lines r..

    Blackness comes to end
    The memory is still clear
    A love from within

    i rated this a 5. very nice poem

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    This is so beautiful.

    The use of imagery you portray in this piece is just wonderful. So beautifully displayed that it creates such strking pictures in the mind of the reader.

    Flow was perfect throughout all three of the stanzas, and the wording you used work very well.

    You write haiku's beautifully.

  • Wow, very good poem. I love it. It's short, but full of emotion. Definately on my favs. 5/5

    <mOnStRiTo'S pRiNcEsS>

  • 17 years ago

    by Pete

    Simply wonderful!
    I have attempted to write a haiku myself and struggle so much due to how short they are.
    I'm very unhappy at how easy you make it look.

    Wonderfully vivid imagery used in this piece. Really brings the poem to life in the readers mind.

    "Diamond drops hanging
    In the sky, like fairytale"
    ^^ Beauty!!

    A poem worth reading over and over again.

    ~Pete.

  • 17 years ago

    by Romantic Lover

    Once again, I really like your haiku's. I've tried to no avail.

    Just beautiful.

  • 17 years ago

    by audrey harris

    Wow. Beautiful haiku, this one is for sure a wonder. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Phantasmagoria

    Pretty. I love haikus : )

  • 16 years ago

    by XxToWriteLoveOnHerWristxX

    Haikus are great to read and the fact that you did three and made them match so beautifully
    made me wonder how many more of these you will write. if you do make more ill have to keep watch just for them. the three here were beautiful and i give it a 5/5 !props!

  • WOW! Simply wonderful and -oh- so colorful poetry gem, your writing here is fascinating, and I found something haunting in priceless beauty which you described. I admire your thoughts. I can not write Haikus, once I could, but not anymore, but I can deeply and strongly relate with beauty that you painted, greatly, which is more important!
    Bravo, 5/5/ you stunned me/.

  • 12 years ago

    by Formidable Muse

    This is very lovely. 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by NobodyKnowsItButMe

    I like the imagery! Good piece of poetry!

  • 12 years ago

    by Khalid M Darwish

    Great piece my friend!
    A sweet crescent moon
    Lingers slowly overhead
    Beacon for the poor

    Diamond drops hanging
    In the sky, like fairytale
    Wonder without end

    Its beautiful that you show the crescent (not the full moon) in its slow movement resembling diamond and everyone knows what's diamond and how it reflect even fine lights propagating them in several directions...this is so beautiful imagery, as a not ending story.

    ^^^

    Blackness comes to end
    The memory is still clear
    A love from within

    The blackness coming after the end proved that the complete story ended but love just started, when the memory got inspired to start a love story from that ending. I loved the connection between nature and love in this part, it's inspiring.

    ^^^
    Overall:
    I like the use of love in nature poems. It's a matter of feeding the nature with emotions.
    What can I say other than this poem is so beautiful, leaving good emotions carved deep in the memories.