Another okay piece in my opinion. I think the third stanza was my favorite for this piece. Out of the two pieces I've read by you, I just think you're not putting enough though or effort into them. I think you need to add a major element - depth. I just feel your poems are a little too loose, shallow and emotionless. Sorry if I seem like I'm picking at you or your work, and I'm nothing special either, but I just tell the truth of what I think...unlike others on this site.

Brad

Chill verse really spoke to me