by Jenni
Oh wow. The emotion in this poem was so raw. I felt as though it was happening to me. There is such beautiful description, absolutely wonderful. 5/5 |
This is so sad. |
by Midnight Sun
But the swingset is broken |
by Whitney
Wow, this has an amazing amount of emotion in it. To lose a loved one is one of the hardest and most painful things to try and get over. I know where ur coming from and how it feels. But they arn't gone until you let them go. Great job, <3 whit |
by Ike Dizzle
Dang that's a sad, sad poem. Almost made me cry and i'm a dude. And no i'm not sensitive geez. lol but excellent poem. If this is real, I'm sorry |
Overall I thought this was a good piece, I especially liked the third, fofth, fifth and seventh stanzas as they were very well written, had good rhymes and told important and powerful parts of the story. I must be honest, I disliked the last line of the second stanza immensely, this is because I feel 'black and blue' has been far overused, but apart from that, it was an enjoyable read. |
by TillyMariex
Omg...you are so talened.i love it =] |