Hmm... Very good. [For being 11. ;) Haha.]

"and in thous other grey roses....."
^ I think you meant 'those'...?

Another thing - All the "....." at the end of every line confuses me...
But other than those 2 things, this was amazing. O_o. :D

"i will see you go in to the unknown......"
^ The ending was amazing, as well. :P Great job. Keep writing.

Overall: 5.5
-- Stephanie <3

I found this poem a little repetitive. When I read a poem I find it far more interesting if it has a constant flow of words instead a constant constant idea.

The conscept and idea was very fresh and abstract but would have been much stronger if you ahd given other ideas rather then continuously saying 'roses' over and over again. repetition is strong but only in small doses.

keep writing