I think you have a wonderful way of expressing yourself. The way you word your sentence is just wonderful. My suggestion though is that maybe you could work on your vocab. Mine's not that great either though.. Maybe we should like start a thread in our club.

I watch a movie that was played in her mind,
Seeing what caused her to become like this.

^^Ooooh. Loved that line.

I think this poem was well written out and very thougtful. I seriously enjoyed reading it. Lol while my crazy mom drove the car with road rage.

Other than that its sad but I got the picture. 5/5 sweet heart. Keep up your writtings like this. Funny how that works right, when where sad about something the best comes out and sometines we think the worst.

So hey, thank you for reading my poem "Freedom". I am really happy I wasn't the only one feeling like that.

Hope that we could calide once more in the future.

Take care.

Awesome poem..
strong feelings..and i like the wording..
it was interesting..
keep it up. :)