by Nigel Oliver Nov 10, 2007
category :
Dark, fantasy /
dark, horror
Azurite skys, beautiful eyes. |
This is my favourite yet. |
Wow I like the rhyming, it gives it a playful edge. Over all I really like it. |
by .K.i.T.t.Y.
Oo. i liked the rhyming. very good. i can't rhyme like that yet. i liked whispering this to myself. while i did so, i realized the flow wasn't consistant. maybe shorten some, or whatever seems right to you. just remember that there needs to be rhythm/meters in your poems. it gives more structure. don't worry, my poems don't always have a perfect meter. |
Very very beautiful in that dark sort of way. |
by Allison
"But a moon eclipsed over many souls" |