This was very well penned

Your story and how you expressed it was quite vivid.

Your word choise was quite well too.

I liked it.
5/5

"You were the one -
hands gripping the steering wheel of volition -
to save yourself."

Free Will to the rescue!...(and such imaginative phrasing, too..)

Bravo!

Endlessly powerful and effective. I know that I repeat myself when I comment your pieces, but what more can I say? I'm honestly impressed.
I can find so many particles that I can relate to in your poems and this one is not an exception.
The imagery here is stunning, completely breathtaking.
Whole poem is excellent, very original and filled with fantastic descriptions.
Keep up!

You are new to me, and i am now a fan, what a splendid joy to read, the sadness and seriousness of a well crafted poem always brings a sense of solace to me, the feeling of not being alone there...original and unique, again, things i long for and appreciate in a poem, so well done..i look forward to reading more...fantastic!
john

Breathtaking... The emotions expressed in great choice of words leaves me speechless.. This is such a powerful write and the imagination in this piece is astounding.. Very intense and eloquent images potrayed and I am awed by the creativity of the words combined in this poem...

Splendid! (: