by santino Nov 10, 2007
category :
Dark, fantasy /
unexplained
Tears of blood you cry... |
Excellent, but rhymes and maybe a little more rhythm could help it. i did absolutely love it though |
I really like this poem out of the ones Ive read.. |
by Laura
This is very well written! The flow felt interrupted at times but i thinkit was becuase the differetn syllable counts sometimes used. |
So I like the way you wrote this poem. you write with your own style and it flows very well. I dont think you should put into stanzas... too many do that... inlcuding myself... and i think that if you tried to do that iwth this poem i wouldnt get the chills i did when i read it for the first time. i loved this poem. as i have mentioned before you are a very mature writer. |
The poem itself was amazing and full of emotion but some of the wording was a little off, and it might be better to put into stanzas because the lines dont flow together as great but would fit amazingly into stanzas |