Fire!

To me it's a great poem in a destructive way. I've found the structure is good enough, something new in concept. Interesting indeed.

Intense. well written and i enjoyed it. Had an excellent rhythm to it.

(whispers take out the cussing) I like it a lot. It flirts with my pyromaniac side.

Heh. The cussing makes it very...you, not the poet essence-you. Too many joining words would be my only critique, it makes sense and tells a story, too structured?
The idea is great, the development, the growing structure....it builds in a great way, you use some wonderful words...

*is looking into it too deep*
*stops*
I like it. I like fire.