Comments : Fire!

  • 16 years ago

    by Lenny

    Heh. The cussing makes it very...you, not the poet essence-you. Too many joining words would be my only critique, it makes sense and tells a story, too structured?
    The idea is great, the development, the growing structure....it builds in a great way, you use some wonderful words...

    *is looking into it too deep*
    *stops*
    I like it. I like fire.

  • 16 years ago

    by Lenny

    (whispers take out the cussing) I like it a lot. It flirts with my pyromaniac side.

  • 16 years ago

    by divine divinity

    Intense. well written and i enjoyed it. Had an excellent rhythm to it.

  • 16 years ago

    by Sourav

    To me it's a great poem in a destructive way. I've found the structure is good enough, something new in concept. Interesting indeed.