Awww this piece is soo emotional, it really captures the reader's attention and i think it's really good. the repetition of the stanza is really effective and repeting the last libe was a really good idea. i read this and it actually neary made me cry
another awesome piece!! 5/5
ali

Aww Amazign write! So many emotions. And i just loved the wording. You could take this pieces in so many different angles. Touching piece!
Specialy loved this line:
I try to hide it the best I can, try to show the same old song and dance
But in reality I'm drifting away in an empty unsatisfying limbo
Found it so creative and the idea was just brilliant!
5/5 keep it up!

This is by far the best work i think ive seen so far it really portrays ur emotions so well as bleak and dark as they are.. u have a gift for expression never forget that..

I know alot of guys who hate 2 cry but this poem made me want 2! great job! another 5/5