Okay, it's a great great poem. But, I don't like how it's in paragraph form. You can figure out how to change it if you'd like.

The emotion is great. The flow would be wonderful if it was broken up. But, it's okay just as it is. I know a few people who write like this [[actually quite a few]]. And, it would just be more neat if it were broken up. But, it's so amazing how it is.

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Wonderful job, darling.