This was great. It was like a story that kept me on the edge of my seat.

This poem I liked, I found it to be simple and effective. The meaning behind it is really dark deep and sad. I think you portrayed it really well and it seemed almost as if you had spoke from experience with the rape. Overall an enjoyable read which I give you a 5/5 for. The only thing that I can suggest for you to edit is to capitalize your "I's" So that the correct grammer is used. Well done. ~Mel

Wow! that was amazing!
it flows perfectly and kept me intrested, and it didnt drag on, i loved it!
5/5!!!

That was creepy, but it had a story/brilliant horror film kind of feel to it. Overall, it was impressive. 5/5

Though simple but keeps the person reads on coz it flows smoothly

keep it up

5/5

I love the way you begin this poem with a clock time, this is very interesting. This is very heartfelt poem and the last stanza was the most powerful one. The flow was awesome and overall this is excellent. It's 5/5 job!!!

I really liked this poem. You could tell how scared the girl was. It flowed really well.

but

"as smile on his face"
I think you meant "a smile on his face"

It was really good! Keep writing!

Cayce