Comments : Take me down the crooked path

  • 16 years ago

    by Sole

    I liked the different ways of describing how you (we?) feel. It was really good imagery and brought across a point of view very strongly. The repetition and the rehetorical questions were well placed. Overall, excellent poem.

    Sole. x

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Wow! Fascinating piece, it is so intense and I admire the way you wrote it, you have so unique style and atmosphere in this poem is simply mind-blowing!
    Every line is filled with powerfully expressed emotions and your choice of words is great too, you should be proud on your self, amazing work.

  • 16 years ago

    by andhereIstand

    This is incredible. the emotion is justtearing through the lines and the message is so clear and real and true.... this really hit me...i love this.
    "We are different
    We are the same
    Neither
    They look at us like poison
    Killing the minds of their children"
    i love these lines....it's very true. if no one told children "that is wrong, stay away from them" then no one would care would they? this is great. wonderful work.

  • 15 years ago

    by lost and incomplete

    Very good , i enjoyed this for obvious reasons

    jamez x

  • 15 years ago

    by AGirlWorthFightingFor

    Starts out kind of general, feel more could be done to elaborate on the last line, seems sort of exploitive just leaving it hanging there for 'shock value', but, yeah, good job, over all