I've never heard of this before :] It's so great. |
I don't know if this specific form has a syllable count of not but it just seems a tad too wordy. I mean, I love your descriptions, don't get me wrong, but maybe if you didn't have all or most of the lines that repeat begin with the same letter it would have helped make it not so clumped and confusing. It's a good poem, you can fele the emotion, it's just the wordyness that subtracts from the message depth. Keep writing and don't let anybody stop you: Talent would be lost if anybody ever quit! |
by Melpomene
I love Triolets I have a few myself but never have found them to be as easy as you made it look lol.I adored this poem though it kept me hooked from start to finish and you picked the perfect words to use within the repetition. The emotion portrayed into this poem was so deep and powerful it really latched onto my heart and wouldn't let go while it worked it's magic. Barbie did a great job with this =P |
I'm beginning to like this form of poetry but haven't tried yet. You expressed yourself very well, but you always do. |