by Shinobi
A nice expression of feeling. You remember your brother in a family holiday. The memories are warm and nice... The structure and flow went great. 5/5 |
Hey this really gave so chills!! it's great how you dedicated it to your bro! that is what made it sweet. |
by ABake
I loved the dedication in this peice. It was short but expressed deep emotion. I loved it all. Great job! |
Wow this is beautiful its very sweet, i love old memories when my family used to be whole, its great to have memories to hold onto great job! 5/5 |
It must be hard around christmas time to be without him, especially when it's a time for family to be together. Your poem was very heartfelt and I can relate to the pain of missing a loved one. Great job 5/5 GG23 |
by kate
This was really short but honestly it got to the point and was really sad in a way because you miss him :| but you did an amazing job though i enjoyed reading it and i hope everything is ok. |
by Blissful
Aww I could just feel the saddness here and it made me emotional. Christmas is to be spent with the ones you love and when they arent there, Christmas does not feel the same. Well done *5/5* |
Aww thats beautiful! i hope you can get to see your bro on christmas. |
by Christina
Awwz short but says so much! great job....5/5 |
by Abu3li
A beautiful pieces expressing the pain of being apart from our dear ones |
by Polaroid
Hmm, very short, but sweet, keep it up |
by Melpomene
This was a short piece which expressed so much throughout your words. I found the dedication to be sweet and sinceree though very sad. It must be very hard to have christmas without your brother, I know i'd miss all of my brothers deeply if they weren't around for christmas. Well done with this. A nice poem. 5/5 ~Mel |
by Cale
I really liked this shows alot of ur emotion about ur memory of christmas!!! |
by Alex
How precious, and sad. It was very pretty. |
by Riley
Short and sweet, and in season too! |
This poem was very thoughtful. |
Such a short lil poem, yet so deep and it says everything it needs to! well done! flows well too. |
Very well-written! The flow was beautiful, the word choice was good, and the concept was unique... 5/5 |
This piece was short and simple but very beautifully written. This piece was very well written and very well thought out. Your choice of words were beautifully put into place. A heart felt read, amazing write. 5/5. |
It's strange how as we get older the family and people we were closest to all those years start to grow apart from us. It gets down to phone calls and holidays and suddenly it's years inbetween conversations. I really enjoyed this piece because most people if not all can relate to the pain of thinking back to how it used to be. amazing job and great flow 5/5 GG23 |