Forever Exposed ( Naani )

by Timothy r   Nov 13, 2007


Love pours
into a shallow pool
exposing my fate
in your arms I slowly pass away

© copyright 2007 by Timothy r

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  • 16 years ago

    by ForeverASickKid

    Im speechless this poem was amazing

  • 16 years ago

    by HOLLY ARMER

    You probably know this but, I absolutely adore short poems. The magical way that in a few short lines can express a hundred emotions and canvas a beautiful picture...truly fascinating.
    I've never written one of these and I might try but you are a hard act to follow.
    Love ya, Holly

  • 17 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I loved this poem Tim, It was so beautiful. I tired this style and I found it really hard I think it's because I usually write long lined poems lol. This style you honestly made it look easy and I loved that about this poem. It was overall a gorgeous poem strung together nicely by you. Well done. ~Mel

  • 17 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow... this is filled with such powerful beauty and sadness which deeply touched me. Amazing poem, excellently written. You did great job with the form, too, and the whole piece is truly original and deep.
    Keep up!

  • 17 years ago

    by Sherry Lynn

    Oh sweet Tim... this poem is so sweet and reminds me of myself.

    You seem to make this style look so easy, but I know how difficult it is to pack such a forceful punch in a few short lines.

    You have done just that wonderfully with a perfect flow.

    Oh, sweetie, just one question... when did you read my diary to find all this out about me lol?

    ~~Simply Me