Bert
This piece really is heartbreakiing.

Knowing where I should be, That is in bed
Still I sit here, ceiling fan rotating over head
Illness is imminent, body in a weakened state
Some relief I must find, If not create

This stanza really touched me deeply. These feelings are so sad. Feeling lost and alone is a very painful thing.

Yawning, mental and physical reserves are spent
Now I should be relaxing, be content
I don't know what is left, or what else I can do
I do know the sky and I have one thing in common, we both are blue.

There is always a reason to hope.
Great job!
Love Cindy

First of all.....perfect title....for the sadness runs throughout....

Nice rhyme scheme.....beautifully written. Though the flow becomes a little off in the concluding verses, I feel the emotional content is enough to carry the reader from beginning to end. Take care, Debbie

Oh my God!!!
last line was totally incredibly awesome!!!!!!!
god this poem is very beautiful, I just dunno what to say, I'm absolutely Speechless..

"All alone, the walls are closing in fast
Unsure on how long things can last"

these lines are so beautifully written too =]
oh you made me feel something really good :) thank you for your constant inspiration

Best of Luck
keep it up
xxx

This was such a good poem! very well written xx

It's a beautiful poem..
Very touching and sad.
Wonderful, that's all I can say about it.
Take care

Everyone feels this way atleast once in their life. The way you penned this poem is just amazing. Its been ages since I've been here, but glad to read this one. Keep it up friend.

Overall I thought it was an okay piece. There were some bits I didn't like, like the last line (it was too long in my opinion) and some bits that I really liked, like 'Some relief I must find, If not create'. I'm intriguied by the way you structure your lines, very creative, I think.

Brad

I was totally drawn in by this write,Maybe because I have the same problem. I could totally relate.you are an excellent writer.