Too Lost In You

by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA   Nov 14, 2007


Every word that comes out of your mouth
Makes me fall more in love with you
Your words are soothing
Always wanting to hear more

It hurts when you say no to me
Because you have become my other half
I can't live without you
Because you're the one for me

There's no one else like you out there
That can make me feel like I do
You're very special to me
And I'm happy to have you in my life

You always understand what I say
And never question me the rumors
That makes me realize
That I'm too lost in you

[WRITTEN FOR A CONTEST]

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  • 16 years ago

    by L0V3 Mi fAMilY

    THANKS FOR THE POEM BABY! I LOVE U!

  • 16 years ago

    by Nikki

    I liked this. good job=))0

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I like the depth and emotion in this piece, they are very easily felt by the reader.

    Your flow was okay for the most part, but could be a little better in some places..try eliminating the filler words (I, you, the etc) and you'll most likely find the flow is so much smoother.

    I love the ending, I thought that was beautifully done, really shows your love and compassion for the person you're writing about.

  • 17 years ago

    by Blissful

    I can relate with the emotion of losing yourself in a person you love. I think the beginning was strong ... but it weakened as the poem went on. I do think that you described the emotion wonderfully. Well done.

  • 17 years ago

    by Lilly

    Very good i love it 5/5

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