by Cindy
Kaylee |
by debbylyn
First of all the title is awesome.....very fitting for the subject! Such a puzzling piece....very intense I think....I've read it over several times and have a pretty good grasp I think. |
by Elapsed
I actually loved the first two lines |
Kaylee, |
by Blissful
First off, the title was truly unique and evoked the desire in me to read more. I loved the beginning stanza, it painted a flawless image and the set the pace for what was to come. I think the repititon of the line, "-Twirl the flower to feel the thorn-" was quote effective in getting your message across. Your vocabulary was mesmerizing and meaningful. The poetic style you used was different, which made it refreshing to read because many use the same styles on this site. All in all it was a beautiful piece. *5/5* |
-Twirl the flower to feel the thorn- |
by ABake
Hmm. Your right, this is sort of confusing. But it all comes together once you give it thought. I liked the mysterious type of idea to it. The flow was not off at all. |
by RobinAnn13
Brilliant! My favorite line is -Twirl the flower to feel the thorn- it fits in perfectly and is not too much to use twice. Your sense of contradicting things to make a point is also brilliant. Not many could pull it off. 5/5 once again. |
by Jenni Marie
Okay..I LOVE this. |
by Nobodys Hero
This poem was beautifuly written, You did an excellent job! |
by Nix
Wow! |
Just to bring your attention to it the end tid bit lacked question marks. Some questions you had down as statements when they weren't. Anyhow...It was unique. You write such strange poetry. I have not yet found one I haven't enjoyed and that is something. Yesterday I was yelled at because I kept giving this girl twos and threes on poems where she had solid fives. :/ Oh well. I just didn't like her poetry. Anyways. Very powerful poem and great use of metaphors. A five for you along with a rose. --,--;-(/@ |
Very unique in style and structure. i really thought it was great, it was intricate, laden with such a simple message, really. it's usually quite difficult for people to put any idea into such poetic, fluid words and make them stand out and still have them retain some sort of beauty and eloquence. truly a magnificent write |
Wow thsi is really touching.... I really like this poem... |
by Nic
This is really good |
Wow nice poem=) |
Wow nice poem=) |
I like it, its like a dislocated thought finally brought into society where we can finally see what your beautiful mind has dished out. The use of words was blended perfect like a strawberry to a blender. how you erected it was masterful, you created an image into my head and a feeling punctured my spine. Good job. More like you did a yet another fantastic job. |
by Melpomene
I must say you have impressed me deeply with your vivid word choice here. |
by Boy
This poem was short.. but i can feel alot of feelings behind the words... |