The repetition of the first stanza in the end is very effective. Whole poem is greatly written and emotions are expressed in a good way. I like this piece a lot, you created good flow and your descriptions are very vivid. |
by 4 track demo
Flow is a great description, very smoothly written, and the emotion i felt while reading it was very geniune and sincere, i'm a little twisted but sad poems bring a little joy to my heart, because it makes me feel less alone, wonderfully done.... |
by PygmyPuff
Wow. its adorable/ (Im not sure if thats the right word...) I like how it hints at a cycle by repeting the first stanza at the end. |
by jLegendc
Wow.. your poems are so unique.. i can't really say anything bcoz i'm speechless of your work.. that's how great it is! great job =] |
by Fluffy
"Meaningless day meets restless night |
by Hawaiizang3l
I love when poems repeat the first stanza! ..anyways, another great read!! very different then most, but thats why it makes it unique! :) |
"Wanting to soar so freely |
by Jason Meres
I do so wish you'd release my heartstrings already. Really, how insensitive it is to write such a beautifully insightful piece of poetry when some of us, only a moment ago, where not trying to fight back tears. |