Comments : Pencil Me In

  • 17 years ago

    by Lithium

    Aww thats such a lovely poem, sweetly wrote with every word. xox sam

  • 17 years ago

    by Elapsed

    I adore this poem Deb.. so much heartfelt emotions..
    "Airbrushed dreams, golden sand, warm
    Sun-kissed, freckled"

    Such elegant words.. a brilliant job dear :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    Debbie
    This piece you have written about your dreams and fantisies with your love is wonderful.

    Ish and Don
    Strum and hum love songs
    Fill the potted palm jungle
    Over the rainbow

    When we can't go to paradise we bring paradise to ourselves.
    I know your dreams will come true.
    Love Cindy

  • 17 years ago

    by Barry

    My silver line shakes shimmering blue....of dreams in heaven with you..In rainbow colours I have seen your face, etched in crimson red...a secret place
    Snow on the mountains i wait for you
    til the sun comes burning through...
    In stillness, I wait, looking at the sky so blue

  • 17 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Your pencil has done it again. Brilliant metaphors come to life with the excellent imagery. Unique and thought provoking. Great job once again!

  • 17 years ago

    by IllNeverBGoodEnouf

    Wow really good. i have a suggestion if you don't wanna listen to it its fine but ill tell u anyways. i think you should separate it into 3 or 4 different stanzas but thats just my opinion and sorry if i made you mad for tell you!

  • 16 years ago

    by Jahieda

    I like this . very nice. 5/5