I liked this,
I really enjoyed your word choice, and the whole imagery altogether, i felt that i could relate to it. Good job :)

Hmm i could see that this poem was in low votes.. well as what i've read it has a nice flow and the lines are great for me.. though its a bit long i consider that all the concepts of this poet has a dept meaning.. even there are some error still the message carrying this poems.. so igive it /5/5