I really dislike reading alot of slang poetry because it usually involves words shortened text message talk but I didn't seem to find any of that in here and i'm really glad. This piece was a bit different from your usual standards. It was good and I liked it because of the warm meaning portrayed but something about it just didn't grasp me. None the less a good piece. ~Mel

This poem tells me that you have a lot you would like to share in terms of your love, your son, your family, your life, etc. But you somehow couldn't get all the words out.

I think you could have made this poem a bit longer and more descriptive.

You're a good writer and I hope to read more.

Awww that's sweet, its good that you have your family... this is a good poem and i dont know what else to say!

Ur a terrific writer i love your poems 5/5

This was very cute.
I love the dedication to your son and fiancee.
The peice flowed nicely, and had a happy air about it.

Well done,
--Elaine.

"Join me to my view my life
I'm not a perfect girl
But I try to do my best
With all the decisions I make"

^^ Beautiful opening, so much emotion in those few lines that the reader can't help but be drawm right into the piece.

" try to make everyone around me happy
And I won't stop until they're happy

I consider myself lucky
To have these people in my life
They make me happy
And I know I'll always make them happy."

^^ I became kind of disinterested on this part..the constant use of "happy" completely spoiled the piece for me.

Try finding synonyms and you'll probably find this makes the piece so much better as it's the same meaning but using a variety of words to show this.

YUP, THIS DOES SOUND LIKE U MY PRINCESS.

I like this alot you should comment my poems