This is a really beautiful poem, but it lacked the structure. Maybe if you put it into stanzas, it would look even more beautiful. 5/5 |
by Jessica
This was pretty good love. The flow was a bit off a points, try and make most of the lines about the same length and this will help improve this. I also liked how you used some more advanced vocabulary, try and use more of this. The emotions in it were quite clear as well. Nice job love. 4/5 |
I thought this was a very nice poem and full of emotion. I agree with the comment on each line being a similar length. It's hard to do sometimes. But you can definitely feel the love and passion in this piece. |
by Crystal Gaze
A beautiful Peice, full of heartfelt emotions. |
by SCARECROW
It flows pretty well, the sentence lengths are varied but not so out of whack that it becomes difficult to read. |
by Marc Ortiz
It was a sweet poem, flow is okay but you have some minir errors :) |